39. Pitch Feedback

Pitch Feedback

Throughout the presentation we aim to get across our pitch imaginatively by using visuals and detailed information about our scenes these include variety of features that contributed to making our pitch a success some of these were mise-en-scene, audience, risk assessments and many more.

After successfully getting our pitch across with we received comments and critiques on how we could do better or what went well. Below is feedback that we collected from our peers.

Firstly our teacher feedback was we need to adjust the target audience from 16-25 to a more specific range - our argument to this is that the film has a cast of these ages where both 16 & 25 year olds come together and merge their lifestyles. We will be changing this, however. 

Group 36

Pros:

1. The presentation was very detailed and well presented to the audience
2. Group 39 was prepared with many different type of examples for the audience to understand thoroughly

Cons:

1.  more visuals and less time consuming so shorten the time length of the presentation keep to a minimal.

Questions:

1. How would you attract your target market/audience?

Marks:

9/10

Group 37

Pros:

1. The presentation was well thought out and detailed but as well explained in all key areas
2. The storyline of the pitch was a good plot and intriguing.

Cons:

1. The presentation was quite long compared to others

Question:

No questions for the group

Marks:

15/10

  Group 38

Pros:

1.  The presentation was very detailed and well presented to the audience
2. There were very good examples included and well explained.

Cons:

No comments about cons

Question:

No questions for the group

Marks:

10/10

 

Marisa gave pur pitch 9/10 and said our pitch was very good and 'nearly perfect'. However she said to have gotten 10/10 we needed to explain more about our target audience.

In light of this we decided to make a age range more specific to 16-21 year olds as we feel they fit this genre (Teen Drama) 

Most of the feedback we got from the groups was very good and positive, so there wasnt much critism in what we could change about our pitch and ideas.

38. Our Pitch

Here we have our pitch for our teen title sequence.

                     

37. UPDATE - We've branded our blog visually

UPDATE // BLOG

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Welcome back to our blog,

Just a quick update to say we've changed the layout of our blog!
We made these changes to match up with the theme of our film, the reason why we chose the orange/mustard colour is because we wanted to contrast the innocence of the girl with everything around her being all dark.
Our background is a graffiti style picture to represent youth.

If you haven't already noticed we:

- Added a clearer theme 

- Made our own header on photoshop

- Added a twitter widget so you can follow us 
- created a menu so you individually see each persons posts they have created

& so much more!

                                     

36. Update Storyboard from feedback

Our Feedback was that the storyboard was fine how it was. Although we could add some more detailed scenes

We have decided to change the name of our opening from 'The Pursuit' to 'Garage 32'. We have decided to change our idea of what is going to be exchanged between the young girl and the male. We thought it would be a more interesting idea to have a key or memory stick as the exchanged item instead of the usual drugs or money. This key would then be significant to the garage where we will end our scene.
We are also going to chnage the ending of our scene. We are not going to end our scene with the bus scene but we will end it at a garage where it will then black out.

34. TimeToast Production Schedule

A rough timeline of our schedule

                                                                                                                                                                   

Change Of Title Name

Changing our title name.

We decide to change our title name from 'The Pursuit' to 'Garage 32b'.

Although originally we thought 'The pursuit' was the perfect name to fit in with our film, we thought we should have a title that focused on one thing that would be the centre of the rest of he film. We decided to use a key as a prop for the exchange that happens, which leaves the mystery as to what that key is for. If we were to do a whole film, we would have a garage as the place where there is something important happens which is the reason for the chase. The idea is that the key is something important, but also possibly dangerous. 

Overall we think the name 'Garage 32b' is a unique name and leaves the audience to wonder what could be so important about a garage.

 

This is the key we use in our title sequence and one of the key props.

33. Storyboard

This is the storyboard for our film opening. We have decided to make some changes to what we will include in our scenes and we are also going to change the name of our film opening.